Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays
death
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penalty becomes the only significant way to control barbaric criminal activities to provide a society
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a
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peaceful environment,
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, few people deem it extremely terrible to take a human life under the name of judicial law. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will discuss why I reckon it is essential.
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of all, Many
henious
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heinous
crimes are increasing day by day
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as
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molestations, rapes and murders. Convicts never feel guilty
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what they are doing, and, set free after 5 to 15 years of imprisonment by the fragile law system. They take it as their pride.
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, If a criminal gets a
death
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punishment
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, it will teach other wrongdoers to think twice to conduct
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dreadful acts. In 2013,
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research has done in Germany. It concludes that crime rates have decreased by 40% after a serial killer
hanged
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to
death
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. he got
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punishment
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after a proven
accussation
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accusation
accusations
of killing his wife.
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, many developed and under-developed countries spend high
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to put inmates in jail for a lifetime.
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money must be used for the welfare of the nation.
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, in building schools and hospitals.
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, it is the responsibility of a state to provide justice to the victims or the family of innocents. In 1998, a 5 years old boy was raped by 6 men which
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hard to tolerate by
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parents. They showed genuine gratitude to the
law-makers
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who helped them to seek justice by
death
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punishment
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via
eletrocution
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electrocution
of all 6 rapists.
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, I have
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visualized
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that sometimes innocent people get
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penalties, but, with time they
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guilty by the authorities. So, there should a body who looks for all the
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and make sure that
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criminal is getting a judicial
death
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. I am ending up
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controversial debate by being strongly in favour of
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capital
punishment
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which is
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step to make the world worth living.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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