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Study overseas while they come to be a more marketable where student face many difficulties what is the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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We had seen a reside increased in the number of
students
 who want to study abroad. it is
also
 true that it has both positive and negative of itself.but I believe that prons of it have overshadowed the crowns of it. when
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 we talk about its drawbacks.
firstly
 I will begin with, new goners must have problems with language.Moving forward can lead
students
 into depression because they don't have any support of family have to face all to difficulties alone.
Also
 take them away,from their more cult and they just forget about that completely. (
for example
)if anyone living abroad changes their dressing sense according,to their culture,and forget about the culture of his/her country.
On the other hand
, upper hands of going to another country.
To begin
 with , it gives
students
 golden opportunity to publish their career in the way they want. They get more mature and responsible because they have to perform all the activities by themselves. (
for example
) coaching , cleaning, paying bills, managing their expenses and more on. It
also
 gives them the freedom of living, getting the things are done the way they want.
also
then
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they
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 don't get anymore depend on their parents to fulfil the basic needs like clothes, internet expensive and many others. In the way of conclusion, it has both advantages and disadvantages. but there are more advantages so
students
 should prefer more going to other countries for study purposes.Yes, the financial condition is always an issue for
students
, but nowadays many companies providing loans for it.
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