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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#people #lives #change
Change
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ourself
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 with current situation and circumstances. Every individual has to implement few changes in their
life
 either personally or professionally. A small
change
 in
life
 can help to define
life
 goals which
leads
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 to
achieve
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specific
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the specific
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milestone
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. It is more important to
change
ourself
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ourselves
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 with the situation
that is
 in demand rather than to be an
ordinay
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ordinary
 individual. Some people think that a
change
 in their behaviour or activity will
led
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 them
degrade
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 themselves and have fear of loss and disrespect. While others, consider it as an opportunity to join the new community and to learn new things. They think that it will help them to sustain in society as they can adopt changes easily. In my
views
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, Learning new things and
to adopt
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 changes is a part of
life
 and one has to be focussed on upgrading own skills and knowledge with market demand. We will only survive
,
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 if we will upgrade
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 with recent trends. I can give you an example of two individuals who are working in
a
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 same company, at the same designation and their mindset. Suraj is working as an assistant in ABC, who always think to
work
 by his own ethics and decisions. Whereas, Urvashi is having a different mindset to
work
. She used to
work
 in a planned and systematic way which are provided by their superiors. In recent times, due to implementation of new technology in
company
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the company
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; every
employees
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 are required to attain some sort of
trainings
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training
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 and to upgrade their skills in available fields. Here, Suraj thinks that if he will learn new things
then
 he will have to move out of his comfort zone and will have to
work
 more time due to which he
did't
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didn't
 appear for any training or skill sessions. Whereas, Urvashi has appeared for all possible
trainings
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training
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 and learning sessions to upgrade herself so that she can deal with all possible situations. As time flows, Suraj will have to
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loose
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 his job due to
lack
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 of knowledge and skills which were demanded by a company.
Hence
, to conclude on the topic of
Change
; It is more important to update
ourself
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ourselves
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 with market demand rather than being
a
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an
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 ordinary person whose values will get defamed in upcoming opportunities.
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  • predictability
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