It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Children

are generally so sensitive that they can learn a lot from everything, including even

punishment

. Some

parents

even consider physical penalizing beneficial for educating their

children

when they are little because it helps them distinguish right from wrong.

However

, I believe physical penalty would never be a useful education method to teach

children

what is correct.

This

essay will suggest other proper punishments and reasons why I am against the corporal penalty. I believe physical punishments are the worst education methods as they could have potentially harmful effects on

children

For example

, when their

parents

spank

children

, their hearts and bodies are seriously offended and injured, not learning anything from the

punishment

. Because

punishment

is violently forcing their values on

children

, the

parents

are just taking them away from an opportunity to think about something independently. When the

children

with the trauma of physical punishments have grown up in the future, their judgment skills might not fully grow. They may have mental diseases like depression or neurosis because they can't adapt to society.

However

, moderating the balance of carrot and stick may be helpful to educate

children

For instance

, sometimes,

parents

give rewards to their

children

when they get a high grade in a certain subject, and the other times they reduce

children

's monthly allowance.

As a result

, the

children

may be motivated to study because they can get rewards commensurate with their efforts.

Thus

parents

can control

children

's motivation by keeping the balance of reward and

punishment

. Overall, I believe

parents

should not physically penalize their

children

because

this

might lead them to mental illness and seek other proper education methods not to hurt their bodies and hearts.

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punishment
positive reinforcement
consequences
time-outs
removal of privileges
open communication
clear expectations
consistency
fairness
disciplinary action
proportionate
moral values
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