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In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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In modern society, people prefer to settle before they become
parents
.
However
, in some countries, they want to establish a family at a young
age
,
instead
. It is causing a gap between
parents
 and their offspring. There are pros and cons of differences between the
age
 of forerunners and their
children
. In the following paragraphs,
advantages
 and
disadvantages
 will be discussed before the conclusion. In the previous generations, there was less awareness and as soon as
children
 became adults, the
parents
 got them married. Because of ,that there was very less gap between the
ages
 of
parents
 and
children
. It was not only affecting
parents
’ health but
also
 causing a high population, poverty, child labour and increased crime rate.
For example
, in some countries
parents
 have up to 12
children
 or more. There is only one person who is earning, and others are parasites. It is hard to meet the basic necessities of life.
Nevertheless
, having
children
 at a young
age
 causing a high illiteracy rate as the basic requirements of the toddlers are not met by the
parents
 how can they educate them.
Although
, there are a lot of
disadvantages
 of less gap in their
ages
 there are some
advantages
, as young
parents
 have much better mutual understanding and more energy to play with their
children
. In the modern
age
, there is more difference between
ages
 of
parents
 and their
children
 and there are a lot of benefits and drawbacks of it. When
parents
 are more settled and able to afford their
children
’s needs and demands.
For example
, nowadays,
children
 are asking expensive auto operative toys, mobile phones and video games which settled
parents
 can afford easily. No doubt, there are a lot of benefits having
children
 when someone became settled but simultaneously, there are
disadvantages
 as well ,for illustration, there are fewer understandings between the state of minds and
parents
 are not enough energetic to play with
children
. After the above analytic discussion, it is concluded that there are
advantages
 and
disadvantages
 of more difference between
ages
 of the
children
 and their
parents
 but there are more
advantages
 in the great difference than the less.
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