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Some people believe that university education should focus on the skills of employment for the future. Others think university education should focus on academic study only. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Employers are always lamenting  the unfortunate gap between what
students
 have learnt in university and what they are expected to know in order to be job-ready, which has set many people thinking: what on earth should these
students
 learn in school, academic knowledge or job
skills
? A populace  with extensive academic background is pivotal  in today’s world. After months or years of work with experiments and sets of data, these young
students
 may be able to contribute incremental knowledge  on a question
that is
 plaguing  people, advancing knowledge in a particular field like math, astronomy, or politics.
This
 is the very reason why governments and scholars set up universities in the
first
 place: to accumulate young intellectuals, test hypotheses through academic research, and
then
 apply the outcomes. For
this
, it is not difficult to understand the view of some people that tertiary education should prepare these young adults for academic
studies
.
However
, there is a difference between what universities are expecting in
students
 and what recruiters are looking for. To those employers, the value added from a university degree substantially decreases as they sometimes think a reliance on the academic
studies
 has robbed  the young of soft
skills
. To confound  these sceptics , faculty should
also
 attach great importance to critical
skills
 of employment in teaching, equipping the young adults with problem-solving, collaboration, learnability, to name but a few.
Such
skills
, to robots, are hard to emulate,
thus
 adding value to the young candidates and enabling them to impress employers more. In conclusion, university graduates are expected to be rigorous as they were doing academic
studies
 and, pragmatically speaking, secure a high-paying job at the same time. These are likely a result of the focus on both academic
studies
 and soft
skills
 of employment. Academic-study teaching solely, clearly, is far from enough.
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