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Using of cosmetics surgery increases this time to improve appearance. Why are the reasons. Is it negative or positive effect.

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In recent times, the number of
people
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 that
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undergone
 aesthetics
surgery
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 increases.
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 is major because human beings having an inferiority complex about themselves and peers pressure influences.
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,
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 has a negative effect later in life.
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 with,the major reason why
people
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 have undergone
surgery
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 for cosmetics purposes is because of peers pressure and lack of confidence about their physical appearances .
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 is due to the fact that maybe their friend or sisters as done the same . Many studies about the effect of aesthetics have shown that
people
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 are greatly influenced by their friends before going for
surgery
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.
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, another reason is due to
people
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 having low self-esteem about their body ,and as a
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 they went for
surgery
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 in order to improve their self-esteem.
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, undergoing aesthetic
surgery
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 has a negative effect on body systems.
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 is because most
people
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 went to an unprofessional surgeon to perform the procedure.
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,
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 might result in infectious diseases due to the procedures when adequate care is not given, which might lead to death . In conclusion, peer pressure is the major reason why
people
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 have undergone cosmetics
surgery
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, and
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 always has a negative on the body systems and physical looks.
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