some young people say that their mobile phone are the most important think they own. Do you think that the use of mobile phones is good. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Although
airline
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is the fastest public transportation, the
carbon
emission by air is much larger than by
car
. I believe that cancel some not essential flights will have more remarkable impacts than
car
restriction
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in
disposing
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global warming. There are several alternative approaches of air transportation that without damaging the connection between two cities but consume less fuel since they running on the floor
instead
of taking off from the land. From
physical
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prospect, a business
airplane
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aeroplane
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is nearly weight
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40 tons, and launching it from land will generate
numermous
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numerous
carbon
dioxide because we need to
gurantee
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guarantee
having sufficient large acceleration to start the
airplane
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aeroplane
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.
However
, driving a
car
on the land just need to take limited force even human can push the
car
by hand. If we reduce the number of flights, the emission of
carbon
dioxide will reduce dramatically thereby preventing
the
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global warming as
carbon
dioxide in the atmosphere will interfere
the
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heat
speard
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spread
from earth to the universe.
By
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diminish the
casues
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causes
of global warming, some extreme weather like
drough
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drought
or flood will
be avoid
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.
In addition
,
comapring
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comparing
with
limitation
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the limitation
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of
car
usage, the negative effect of reducing the number of flights is lesser, especially for some inland cities. Using
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a vehicle
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vehicle
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to travel to another city is popular and people can enjoy the scenery on the road. If cancel some airline, visitor can use alternative approaches like
divring
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diving
driving
car
, taking bus or train which will consume less fuel and still can reach the destination. Not only can these options prevent
from
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fierce
carbon
emission
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but remain a strong connection between
two
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cities. In conclusion, stoping some unnecessary
airline
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instead
of
restrict
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restricting
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car
ownership to protect the environment is considerable.
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