Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

It has been suggested that topic for discussion, many
people
claim that some
data
should be shared with
others
about scientific research,
business
and so on. The
others
argue that it is essential or decisive so any
data
mustn'
t
be known by everyone. We will discuss both situations in
this
essay.
Lastly
, in my opinion on
this
matter, all
information
oughtn'
t
to be got by everybody.
To begin
with, some
people
consider that
information
must be learned by the majority. As a matter of fact, technology and knowledge are making progress step by step, so the majority believe that
information
has to be
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spread
spreaded
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spread
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about
business
, scientific research and
others
. Much
data
is useful for getting experience, upgrading thinking style, worldwide and
others
. As an example, if
information
can be got a person, he or she can commence to
business
and
this
process is profitable for getting better.
Furthermore
, the young can be attracted to learn
process
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from
early
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age.
Hence
, the
first
opinion is able to be explained by these reasons and patterns. Let us take a look at
others
think
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that some
information
is crucial or important and it shouldn'
t
be known by everybody. In fact,
information
fight
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have increased than before time, so all
data
mustn'
t
learned
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by many countries or
people
.
For instance
, if academic
information
is get
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all countries, probably they will try to improve their guns and it is
irrevelant
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irrelevant
and vain for mankind. What is more,
business
information
can be utilized by other governments. Briefly, I believe strongly, each
data
oughtn'
t
shared
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be shared
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with countries or
people
, because each government had better protect many hazards. Weighing up both sides of the argument, I must admit that much
information
is very necessary to be shared freely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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