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Death Penalty is an effective method to stop heinous crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?? Give your opinion

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The
death
discipline
 is a controversial topic for many.
Although
 it has been abolished in most apply countries around the world, some countries still practice the
death
discipline
 due to its long history. The
death
discipline
 continues to divide people. Those who believe that it is the best way to stop heinous crimes and those who oppose it believe that it is expensive and inhumane.They point to data and comparisons of societies with and without capital punishment and argue that there is no evidence that it deters crime.
This
 essay will discuss the opinion of whether the
Death
discipline
 is a suitable punishment or not. The
death
discipline
 is not a suitable punishment. The biggest debate is that human life cannot be taken. every human being has the right to live including criminals who have committed heinous crimes. sometimes even innocent people are given
death
Add an article
the death
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 penalty which
make
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 them lose their faith in the judicial system.
then
 there are criminals who have been given
death
Correct article usage
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 penalty who truly have remorse for their actions but do not have the chance to change themselves.
For example
, Balwant Singh Rajoana , a former terrorist who assassinated a former Chief Minister of Punjab, India is one
such
 example.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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