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Many developing countries require aid from international organisations to develop. Many people think that this aid should be financial, while others think that practical aid and advice are more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#countries #aid #organisations #people #advice
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The given plan shows the layout of the Grange
park
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, when it was opened in the year 1920 and of the current year. Overall, it can be depicted that major changes took place in the centre and the northern side of the
park
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, and
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 the garden has been refurbished with modern facilities. As can be seen in the diagram, the
park
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 is refurbished with modern amenities
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 as a cafe, an amphitheatre and a play area for children, which replaced one of the rose gardens, a stage for musicians and a pond for water plants respectively. The seating area is now more organised and it is rearranged to the centre of the
park
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 around the rose garden which was built in place of the fountain.
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, the glasshouse is replaced with a water feature. The entrances to the
park
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 and a rose garden on the northern side remained unchanged. An underground car parking has
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 been constructed and the entrance for the same is on the east side of the
park
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.
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