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The Government should do more to reduce traffic accidents. Do you agree or disagree?

#government #traffic #accidents
The tragedies on the
roads
 all across the globe have always been a matter of concern for the
government
 for which more actions and efforts are required to address the issue. I certainly agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will discuss the points of my agreement.
Firstly
, the reason why the
government
 should put more effort to fix the
road
 rage issue is the existing measures are not enough to address the increasing number of
road
 rages. It means despite many plans which involve high expenditure are implemented, the result has never been satisfying as those plans involve some regulations for automobiles on the
roads
 that are often violated.
As a result
, the trend of traffic
accidents
 is still rising. To exemplify the speed cameras were installed to limit the velocity of vehicles to decline the
road
accidents
,
however
, the existing number of deaths due to the same is 3 to 4 thousand per year which is concerning.
Therefore
, considering the inclining trend of
road
 rages, the
government
 must take
further
 actions despite the methods applied in the recent past.
Secondly
, apart from the actions to resist
road
 tragedies, the
government
's contribution towards building a safe infrastructure that ensures
road
 safety is certainly not enough. It means that many
roads
 are filled with damages, unevenness, potholes which are often overlooked by the concerned authorities and are not repaired until and unless some severe accident takes place.
In addition
, waterlogging on the
roads
 in many areas across the world contribute to
accidents
.
Such
 aspects which must be taken care of by the
government
 authorities are ignored and a pro-active resolution action taken towards
such
 infrastructural issues still requires a lot of improvement. In conclusion, considering the escalating trend of
road
accidents
, the efforts put by authorities are not sufficient and more stringent and active approaches must be introduced to decline
road
 rages.
Submitted by ankit.hart on

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