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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

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In the present context, it is obvious that the
families
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 are much different in terms of
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 structure and gender roles in a family unit as opposed to a family
few
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 decades back.
Families
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 today are very small in size since single parenting is not uncommon.
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 roles of parents have changed drastically.
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, marriages among
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same-sex
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same
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the same
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 sex are legalized in many countries in the world now. In my opinion, most of these changes have a positive impact
towards
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family
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the family
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 itself and
society
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. Relevant factors regarding
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To begin
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 or
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 family is a reflection of
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society
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. When it comes to roles among family members, in most
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the
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families
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, both parents support
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the economical stability of the family and they both share the responsibility of the children. If we consider
the a
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 family
few
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a few
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 decades back,
situation
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the situation
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 was rather different.
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, women were supposed to look after the children while men were supposed to take care of financial stability. It is needless to say that
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 has completely changed by today. From my
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this
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 is a positive tendency since family and children are well supported by both parents.
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, when it comes to the structure of the family today,
same sex
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 marriages
as well as single parenting
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, as well as single parenting,
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 can be seen in many parts of the world. From my point of view,
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 is a positive trend since having
a different sexual preferences
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a different sexual preference
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 as opposed to conventional
opposite sex
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 marriages is no longer
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a reason
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 to be discriminated
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against.
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 In conclusion,
families
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 play an important role in
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society
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.
Families
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 have been changed a lot over
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last
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the last
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 few years in various aspects as aforementioned. As per my view,
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society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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