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Many musicians today gather in different cultures of the world and can enjoy it. Do you agree or disagree

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today invention different
Fix the agreement mistake
musicians
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musician
 can support every culture in the world, I agree
this
 issue that
music
 can help for gathering bare others.
Firstly
, every human enjoy from good
musician
 and many syologites advise That a good
musician
 can be helpful for their lives and it is vital ,
for
example
Add the comma(s)
,example
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 every an athlete for exercising needs a
musician
 because any activity needs
music
otherwise
 won't be successful for informing action.
Secondly
, a
musician
 is an international language and it can support for their messages,for ,example many people don't know the English language
also
 they can respond their need for sending a they several messages
such
 as pace announces ,alter massage, happy
music
 and so on.
This
 result without known English language can supply for communication and we show many musicians collaborate of different culture and many of people enjoy them.
finally
 parts of time the world we are seeing that many kinds of
music
 are increasing the rate of
cooperate
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cooperating
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 between different
music
 and it is basic for maintaining types of
music
.
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