Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is often argued that we have a lot of
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to select something more than
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people
can use more efficient in
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and they have more
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in their job. The main reason why I believe
people
have lots of choices is
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nowadays it has
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modern
technology
that is
useful and convenient.
Technology
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people
to find any information that they want to know about. To illustrate, we use the Google to search data and solve the problem that
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in our life, and the Google has several websites that we can choose any blogs that you love
also
there is a lot of option to lead you to the best
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. Another reason why I support the notion that
opportunity
in occupation is much more
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than
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business
economics are progressing
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every year that can lead
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of investment in the
business
company.
This
is why many companies have to announce to find new employees and
this
is lead to increase the
opportunity
for
people
to pick their job and company which is satisfied.
For instance
, in recent
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, The UK
business
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rapid growth.
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worker
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. In conclusion, I completely agree that
people
can pick several choices that they wanted.
This
is because
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in
technology
to find their information and the development of
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business
make almost population have more
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to choose their career and work company.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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