IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3.5

Some people say that in our current moden age, it is unnecessary to teach hand writing skills to children what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #moden #age #hand #skills #children
In today's
morden
Correct your spelling
modern
world
 everything is digital from writing a letter to calculating complex
algorithems
Correct your spelling
algorithms
. There is a school of thought
thinks
Correct pronoun usage
that thinks
show examples
 that in recent times it is useless to teach
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
penmanship to children. I
am completely disagree
Change the verb form
completely disagree
show examples
 with
this
 thought and I will give my reason for that in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, before some century ago there was not even invention of the paper and a pen. But with that invention
whole
Correct article usage
the whole
show examples
world
's communication is changed.
For instance
, writing letters to note down important notes on
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 piece of paper. Sure in today's developing
world
 how to use a computer or any kind of device is necessary, but it is not
a
Change the article
an
show examples
 excuse for
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
excluding
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
show examples
traditional ways for recording information.
Secondly
, in process of storing
this
 information on machines and
computer
Add a comma
,computer
show examples
 you need all the
equipments
Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
show examples
 which don't come at cheap price, and not only that but you have to gain a basic
knowldege
Correct your spelling
knowledge
 to how to use
this
 automation.
Last
 but not least
this
 type of technology is not available in all
part
Fix the agreement mistake
parts
show examples
 of the
world
 yet do it is impossible to get
every one
Replace the word
everyone
show examples
 hooked up on technology. To sum up, I reiterate my opinion that knowing how to use
this
 morden
developnent
Correct your spelling
development
 is as
usefull
Correct your spelling
useful
 as knowing
a good writing skills
Correct the article-noun agreement
good writing skills
a good writing skill
show examples
.
Submitted by pakshit910 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: