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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Nowadays,
students
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have more opportunities to
study
 abroad
in contrast
 to the earlier days where they studied in their motherland
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obtain their university degrees.In
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 I would be discussing the advantages and disadvantages. There are ample reasons for a person to
study
 abroad than studying in their own
country
.The primary reason is that it makes an individual independent as well as responsible.
Next
,
students
 get to socialise with citizens from different countries which in turn leads to building
a professional relationships
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professional relationships
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.
For instance
, a student from India studying in Germany could develop a good and healthy relationship with the German student.Another reason why people prefer to
study
 abroad is that they get to experience the culture of the
country
 they are residing in. According to a recent
study
 conducted by Cambridge University ,about 75% of the
students
 prepare themselves to
study
 abroad92
Although
 there are multiple reasons for a person to
study
 in a foreign
country
, which is viewed as pros,there are various reasons why it could be seen as cons.
Firstly
,
students
 may tend to face problems in settling down which leads to discomfort and homesickness.
Secondly
,some of them find it extremely difficult to adjust to the new method of teaching.Sometimes ,
students
 tend to face culture shock which may them more anxious , stressed and tensed. In conclusion, it can be seen that boon and bane are like the two sides of the coin.It solely depends on the person as to how he converts bane to boon and how he makes his stay in another
country
pleasent
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pleasant
.
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