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Band 3.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. Give the reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, Online technologies have a significant role in our daily life. Many
people
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 always using online technology on mobile
phone
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phones
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 or
computer
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computers
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 to make them more
convenience
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such
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 as pay
bill
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bills
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, watch tv
program
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programs
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, read online
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
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. Some
people
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thought
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though
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thought
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 that printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
books
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 are not necessary anymore since we can get
it
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them
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 in
online
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an online
the online
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 format.
However
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, I believed that publishing in
paper
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 still remaining.
First
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 of all, Printed
books
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 have important for
people
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at
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 least 3 groups,
for example
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, In
the
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apply
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poor countries, their
citizen
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citizens
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may be
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maybe
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 lack
of
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apply
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equipment and internet signal. Blind
people
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 can not read
alphabet
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the alphabet
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 on
tablet
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tablets
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 and
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last
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 group is children, because reading on screen is not proper for their eyes.
Moreover
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, Publishing
in
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apply
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books
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have
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has
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an
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a
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 unique of it. We can keep book collections and using them for
a historical evidence
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historical evidence
a piece of historical evidence
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 argued that online
books
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such
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 as
in
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apply
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Kindle or mobile
application
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applications
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 are easy to read on their equipment but
it
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they
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 might be out of battery so we can not read them
it
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in
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this
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 situation. Printed
book
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books
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 do not face
with
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apply
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this
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 problem, we can read
it
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them
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 all the
times
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time
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. In conclusion, I believe that print
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
book
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books
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 can be alive in the future even though online format comes to share their area.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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