Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

In recent days many
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students
becoming more
depending
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on the
internet
. During the
time
internet
is beneficial, it has many drawbacks influence and
it
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use
for teaching aim should be reduced. I completely disagree with
this
statement and I think
internet
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is useful in several ways not only for education In the
first
place,
internet
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makes people and
students
life easier, it has many benefits affects in our life and
fully
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helpful, for entertain in leisure
time
or for meeting new people
in
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social media.
For example
, if
students
have
a
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free
time
they can
use
it for fun to playing video games or chatting with friends or watching movies.
Moreover
, it
teach
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them how to control themselves and manage their
time
to make plans for studying
time
and for leisure
time
. If there
is
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students
lives
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in
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overseas they absolutely need to contact
with
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their family
On the other hand
, if
internet
get
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avoid
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and available in education only it might be lead to extremely disadvantages impacts in student's life.
Such
as
,
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depression, sorrow and
also
bleakness they need some free
time
to get some rest for more productivity.
Furthermore
, pupils who live abroad need to
use
internet
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if they do not they will
faces
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many difficulties in many things.
For instance
, how to arrive
to
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the campus or anywhere by using google maps, know their utility bills, translate words if they did not know the meaning of In conclusion,
internet
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has many benefits and drawbacks.
Students
need to learn how to
use
it in a way that develops them and
also
knowing their priorities
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  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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