Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

Nowadays, most parents try their best to buy any kind of
toys
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for their
children
in order to make them happy.
Nevertheless
, endless purchases of
toys
have not only positive
effect
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to
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kids
,
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but
also
some negative.
This
essay will show which advantages and disadvantages exist when
kids
have a large
amount
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number
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of
toys
.
To begin
with, there is
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and
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an
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incredible
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an incredible
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variety of goods for
children
in our modern world. Fortunately, a multiple choice of latest
toys
lets
children
learn and get
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new knowledge while they play.
For example
,
such
toys
as
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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, roller skates or scooters help
kids
develop physically.
Then
puzzle
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puzzles
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, blocks or lego have a positive impact on
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cognitive thinking of
children
.
Additionally
, there are lots of
toys
that make
a
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process of learning letters, numbers and things like that easier and funnier.
Moreover
,
children
who have many
toys
are able to share with others and make
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friends
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through roles and games. In
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, a large number of
toys
helps little ones use their fantasy and creativity
,
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when they play with friends.
Although
,
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a bid amount of
toys
has many advantages, there are some disadvantages that families should be aware
about
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.
Firstly
, it is difficult to focus on one or two
toys
when there are so many of them in front of a child.
Then
, perhaps it will lead to problems with concentration and attention when
children
grow up.
Secondly
,
kids
who get used to playing with different
toys
every day can lose a special contact or friendship with their
favorite
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toys
and will not have a sentimental memory in adulthood. In conclusion, in my opinion,
parent
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parents
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are capable to make
kids
childhood more joyful and happier thanks to
toys
.
However
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it is more important
get
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to get
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enough love and attention from their parents at the same time.
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