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trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne.

#trends #amounts #food #melbourne
The table gives some data about the number of
fast food
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fast-food
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 used in Melbourne.
In addition
, there are 5 kinds of fast food
in
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this
 table (hamburger, fried chicken and
rice
,
salad
,
noodles
).
Finally
, there are the shows of 3 years(2005, present, 2025). Overall, the highest show will belong to
hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
in
contrast
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 the minimum pointer belonged to
salad
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the salad
a salad
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. With regards to
hamburger
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hamburgers
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, fried chicken,
salad
. The index of fried chicken will develop slightly between 2005 and 2025 and it will level off to 45. In especially, the statistic of
salad
 will increase dramatically from 2005 to 2025 and it will equal to 41 in 2025. Generally, the least pointer was appreciated with 5 in
salad
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a salad
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,
on the
contrary
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 the maximum index will reach 51 in 2025. The statistic
are
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 relatively closer to each other exception is
salad
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a salad
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 in 2005. In terms of fried
rice
 and
noodles
. The indexes of fried
rice
 and
noodles
 were the same in 2005 with 6. The statistics of fried
rice
 both present and 2025 occur with 9,
in
addition
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 the number of
noodles
 will equal in 2025 with 9.
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