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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, the trend has been increased towards tourism to other
countries
. A section of society thought that
people
visit
 other
countries
 need to follow their trend ritual and cultural habits. Others contradict
this
 statement and argue that
people
visit
 that country, not adapt to that
culture
, and
locals
 need to adapt positive points. According to my perspective, tourists need to recognise their local
rituals
 and
show
 their own
culture
. In the course of the essay, I will discuss both viewpoints.
Firstly
, those
people
visit
 other
countries
 to explore it. They need to follow local customs and respect them because if they do follow that tradition
then
show
 exhibit their
culture
 if
people
 start to wear that
culture
then
 their own
culture
 will diminish
then
 might be after some time that local tradition disappear. Visitors need to
show
 equality with those
locals
, and the best way to
show
this
 equality is to apply the local rules themselves.
For example
, visitors come to a city and they do not local food, to fulfil
this
 demand there will open a foreign food restaurant they will decrease the demand local foods. The opponent of
this
 debate argue that tourists go there in small groups in that highly populated areas if these
people
 follow own traditions
then
 it does not destroy that local
culture
 which is followed by the majority of the public.
Instead
 of
this
, they destroy their
rituals
however
 they will teach positives of their own
rituals
.
For instance
, if visitors do yoga in the morning time and the teach their
locals
 which will good for their healths. In conclusion, tourists
visit
 other
countries
instead
show
 off their
culture
 they respect that local
rituals
 tradition,
although
 they teach positive things to
locals
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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