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Dear Mrs Brooks, I am writing
this
 letter to request for transferring to the headquarter in England for half year.
First
 of all, the reasons why I would like to work in the head office overseas for six months which is from 11th June to 11th December 2021 are I desire to improve my skills in international management and English for business. I found the headquarter requires a person who is in another country to be its team in short term, and I intend to enrol on a short English For Business course while I am working there. During that period, Please do not worry about my responsibility. I have discussed with Mr John regarding my transfer he is willing to cover when I am in England. Mr John is well organised, and he is a fast learner.
However
, I will be in charge of working remotely while I am overseas if you want. It would be excellent if you help me to arrange a company certificate and document of transferring. Look forward to hearing from you Yours Sincerely, Ramon
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