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Today foods travel thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays, the production process is widely spread among hundreds of countries. In turn,
foods
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 can travel a long distance in order to arrive at the needed shop. In
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 a peculiar method and explain why I consider that
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 is a positive trend towards great outlooks. Each country has its unique technologies and techniques that benefit them a lot, especially, in businesses. Indeed, almost every nation has a field where they have achieved much more progress rather than all other countries combined. In Russia,
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, the farming aspect prevails. The wide farmers' community improved technics for gathering crops, and now they utilize them with a greater outcome that, in turn, yields lower prices for the final consumers.
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, even though there are additional costs for transporting,
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 harvest, still brings much more profit not only for buyers but
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 for companies. I believe that
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 tendency has only a positive impact on a whole society. By specialising only in one particular market area,
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 can develop innovations and find out about the most effective ways of production. In Canada,
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, people came up with
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more efficient factory equipment that contributes to a considerable
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 in expenses including time and money
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, if each country innovates and incorporates something new, it will definitely contribute to the national economics and technological sphere too. In conclusion, given the fact that now food
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 by different countries because of better performance, I feel that
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 strategy is promising and will lead to positive results within the technological and
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 aspects on the horizon .

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task response
You have addressed the prompt by discussing the reasons for the trend of foods traveling long distances and evaluating it as a positive trend. Good job on staying focused on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing reasons, and a conclusion summarizing your stance. However, you could improve the introduction by providing a clearer thesis statement. Ensure that each paragraph connects logically to the next for better cohesion.
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