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Many countries now face an economic downturn so it is better for each country to focus on its own problems rather than helping other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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In recent years many
countries
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 have been facing increasingly economical issues. In
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 regard, some people believe that it is better
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countries
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 handle their own
problems
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 without considering those
problems
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 which are related to the other nations.
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, I would argue with those who think that in economical disaster helping other nationalities are crucial. On the one hand, some citizens are keen to think that assisting other
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 obligatory to each country. There are several reasons why they think in
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 manner.
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, all of us are living in a global village ,so we have to help each other in times of
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.
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, more economical
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 are common between societies and we can better tackle the
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 when we are cooperating with each other.
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, when we assist other
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 in their difficulties we can
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 have the expectation they return our help whenever we
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.
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, I believe
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countries
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 have to support other
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 to tackle their issues, they should
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 concentrate on their own matters whenever they face difficulties.
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 is because they can be more agile and if they focus
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 on their own needs, they will better respond to the
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.
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, in the economical
crisis
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 in 2008 which the USA was affected by economic bankruptcy, if they had helped other nations like china (that they were affected by the
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 too), they would have not survived after the disaster. Another reason is that support other
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 will
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 lead to loss of the country resources,
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, it will be very time consuming for those other nations to pay back their mortgage. In conclusion, while it will be helpful if
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 in economical
crisis
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 support each other, I believe it is more rational when we encounter an economical downturn, we concentrate
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 to find the solutions about own
problems
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 than think of the others.
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