The internet was probably the most significant invention of the last 30 years. Without it, our lives would be completely different. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Internet is a
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tool
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connects all the computers of the world.The history of mankind has seen thousands of inventions ,but among all ,
Internet
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the Internet

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is one
such
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completely changed our lives.I staunchly
agree
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the aforementioned rubric due to some
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noticeable
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reasons, I would like to present my views by diving deeper into the topic before deducing
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conclusion. There is a wide variety of reasons
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,
Internet
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the Internet

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provides easy access to
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range of subject knowledge.
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, it
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our life by providing news of worldwide within seconds of its
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. The news is not only
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happy but
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devastating.It is well illustrated by sad news which
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spreaded
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spread

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like
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of Taliban overtaking Afghanistan.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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