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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart and graph illustrate the number of participants in the Olympics ever comparing 2 genders. Overall, the total number of participants increased to more than 3
times
 during the years, of which
females
 multiplied up to 40
times
 and
males
 slowly went up to less than 2
times
 given each year. Between 1924 and 1952,
although
males
 accounted for more than 90% of all, their
rising-rate
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 recorded lower at 50% than
females
' at 400%.
In other words
,
males
 increased by 1,500 from 3,000 to 4,500, whereas
females
 jumped up to 5
times
 from 100 to 500 during the years. Between 1984 and 2012, there was a higher increase of the total than the former years, due to
females
' surge. More specifically,
males
 rose gradually by only 700 from 5,200 to 5,900, while
females
 went up dramatically by approximately 3,300 from 1,500 to 4,800. Following
this
, the gap between
2
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the 2
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genders declined to one-fourth from 4,000 to 1,000.
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