Write an essay at least 250 words about your visiting to a popular place

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Vietnam is a country with lots of natural wonders.

Therefore

, my parents have taken our family to many places with beautiful sceneries. And I still remember my trip to

Halong

when I was 7 with my family. Located in the middle of the Gulf of Vietnam,

Halong

bay

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is a famous beach and bay that has been recognized as a UNESCO World Heritage Site. It appeals

millions

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of tourists annually. We went back there

last

summer. We thoroughly researched the area before choosing

this

place

. It was our

first

trip to

this

beautiful

place

, and

also

a great experience for our family. We had a blast at the beach at

Halong

Bay. There were various activities going on there,

such

as sailing, swimming, camping and. At the end of the day, we went back to our hotel., after an exhausting day but full of fun and

satisfactory

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This

place

is truly an experience of a lifetime. The highlight of its sightseeing was the spectacular landscape, which included various natural features

such

as the crystal clear

sea water

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and the mountain ranges. I was attracted by their scrumptious seafood. It was extremely good, from the crabs to the lobsters. The

specialties

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are very awesome, especially the chopped squid. I

also

like the people who live in the area, as they were incredibly welcoming and accommodating. They

also

made me feel as if I was at home. In the end, we had tons of fun. Indeed,

Halong

is a perfect

place

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you want to have

wonderful

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a wonderful

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time with your family. It has stunning views, delicious food, and

furthermore

, friendly people with pleasant service. I hope that I will come back there on my

trip!

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

284 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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cultural landmarks
economic impacts
tourism
revenue
historical identity
tangible connection
aesthetic appeal
educational activities
sustainable tourism
preservation practices
overcrowding
property values
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