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Nowadays most green energy is becoming evermore prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Year after year, due to the
developing
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 of human activity, people need more and more
energy
. Nowadays, the consumption of
the
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renewable
energy
 is becoming more common. Some individuals reckon that
this
 is beneficial for our planet,
however
, others think that
such
 consumption might have a detrimental impact on the environment and human
being
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beings
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. In my view, the usage of green
energy
 is more safe and eco-friendly, rather than the usage of other sources.
First
 of all, green
energy
 sources can reproduce with no human intervene,unlike non-renewable sources,
such
 as fuel or minerals. That means that while using water, solar or wind
energy
, people help to preserve the diversity and variety of the Earth. One more significant advantage is less pollution – much less waste, poisonous substances and gases,
such
 as CO2, are emitted during the consumption of renewable
energy
 which makes
this
 method more eco-friendly.
Also
, it saves the planet from the greenhouse
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affect
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 and changes in the climate in general.
However
, there are
also
 some minuses.
For example
, to consume produce water
energy
, massive hydroelectric power stations must be built. It costs
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the government a lot, as it requires huge amounts of materials and
labor
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 force.
Moreover
,
such
 buildings break the natural habitats and frighten wild animals, thereby disrupting the natural balance, mostly because
such
 stations are usually stood located on the big rivers or near the forests. Having evaluated the pros and cons above, I can make a conclusion that despite a number of disadvantages, the usage of green
energy
 has more benefits and positive sides for both the planet and the people.
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