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In the future, nobody will buy printers newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #printers #newspaper #books
Nowadays,
internet
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the internet
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 system
become
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has become
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 more
influence
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 in
the
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most part of the
world
. Some
people
 consider that
newspaper
 factories and
books
store
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stores
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 will
be disappear
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disappear
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 in the near future. I totally agree that online site has effecting dominant in social life
for
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forget
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get
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an information
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information
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 no matter from with part of the
world
. The reason why are as follows. There is no doubt that the
internat
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internet
 has become the main
sources
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source
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 of communication in every
countries
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country
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, making
the
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modern technology is rapidly developing.
In addition
, the development of social
nextworking
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networking
 has taken a whole
world
 get involve for the connection.
For instance
, in the
resent
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recent
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 times,
people
 from around the
world
 could get the news from
difference
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nation
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nations
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 just only searching from the internet via WiFi by using
smartphone
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a smartphone
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 or computer,
such
 as the news from BBC in England and CNN in
Americaand
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America
America and
, they
also
 grow the news online platform for streaming real information through various type of online
media
 .
Therefore
, they could consume the new immediately just only one
hours
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form
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from
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 another side of the planet.
On the other hand
, the printers
newspaper
 or
books
 had been popular in
last
 decade years.
However
, in
this
 generation
people
 lacked
on
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in
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 reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
 because the internet has become dominated
for
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by
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 social
media
, so it is
huge
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hugely
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 effective for a printers
newspaper
 and
books
 publishing.
As a result
, there were
less
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fewer
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 crowed who intended to acquire information via printed
media
.
Hence
, gigantic publishing companies had to permanent closed.
Other
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 reason, the economic community attempt to a campaign that
people
 should restrict
for
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apply
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use the
papers
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of papers
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 to reduce the
globle
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global
wroming
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worming
warming
wrong
. In conclusion, the essay has explained why is that I
strong
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strongly
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 agree that printing
media
 will
disappeared
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disappear
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 in the future and
people
 ability to read everything from online
media
 as it provides
people
 with the benefits of convenience and
less
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fewer
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 times consumption.
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