Two maps show an Island, and changes that take place after construction of tourist facilities.

Two maps show an Island, and changes that take place after construction of tourist facilities.
The two maps provide information about an
Island
,
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and
also
show changes that take place after the
construction
of more tourist centres.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
Island
has witnessed sustainable development after the
construction
of more tourist facilities. It is
also
noticeable that the
Island
has only a
beach
has a tourist centre before the transformation.
To begin
, before the
construction
, the
Island
has only a
beach
for tourism ,which was located toward the far end of the west.
However
, the
Island
has two seas ,which can be seen
at
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the Northwest and South, and
the
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palm
trees
at
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the western and eastern parts of the
Island
. After the
construction
, the
Island
saw substantial development.
However
, the
beach
,
palm
trees
and Northwest sea still maintained their previous location, but the
beach
is now for swimming purposes. The accommodation was built, which surrounded the western
palm
trees
with a footpath from the
beach
for easy access.
Furthermore
, more houses were
also
built towards the west of the eastern
palm
trees
, with reception and restaurant
also
added, and both
located
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almost at the centre of the
Island
, with a footpath that connected them together. The previous sea at the south part of the
island
is now used as a pier ,which allows vehicles trunk to get access to the
Island
.
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