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It is important that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many migration processes can be seen around the world. As a consequence of those processes, you can see children from different cultures interacting in the same school. It is agreed that these mixtures of cultures, as well as
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, bring benefits to the
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. As we will explain below, the improvement of the learning experiences and the
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 of soft
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, are some of the benefits that can be obtained from these interactions. The
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 consequence found was the improvement of the learning experience.
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, some schools have as their final work the
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 of a project to be carried out by groups of kids from the same grades but from different classrooms. In
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 with
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 types of abilities are brought together.
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 of soft
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 in
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 who study in a multicultural environment.
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, one study found that
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 from schools located in the
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 between countries, developed better
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communication
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empathy
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. The study showed that these improvements are the results of the interaction with schoolmates from other cultures.
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 with a wide variety of social backgrounds can benefit greatly. To summarise, letting children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school can bring benefit to their
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. If schools take
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 will get better results for themselves and for their
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promotes Inclusivity
  • Fosters Equality
  • Appreciate Diversity
  • Equitable Society
  • Broad Perspective
  • Problem-solving Skills
  • Real-World Diversity
  • Navigate
  • Global Society
  • Strive for Improvement
  • Unique Talents
  • Healthy Competitive Spirit
  • Reduce Social Inequality
  • Access to Resources
  • Empathy
  • Social Skills
  • Communication
  • Teamwork
  • Conflict Resolution
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