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Some parents believe that their children should do educational activities during their free time. Others say that in this way children are under pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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For many
parents
, the
further
 career of their
children
 is
one
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of paramount importance. Henceforth, some
parents
 think that their
children
 should not waste their time even out of school and their activities must contain some educational activities, whereas others assert that it gives too much stress for
children
. I can neither support nor oppose both views, rather I take a neutral position for the following reasons. Against the backdrop of the increase in competition among students, the educational pressure has been getting more serious. In response to
this
, acquiring academic thinking methods from the earlier period through seeking opportunities for study
besides
 the school will be an asset when
kids
 grow.
For example
, according to an article, it is alleged that the capacity of thinking of adults is contingent on how he spent his time when he was a kid.
Besides
this
, it is
also
 confirmed through a survey that 70% of students who enrolled in the famous university in Japan had received some intelligence education when they were small. Since
children
 often face individual study, it is important to intervene to promote educational activities outside of the school.
On the other hand
, given that many
kids
 are often keen to play TV games or to do sports, it is necessary for their
parents
 to control their
children
.
However
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 though,
this
 might be a stress for
kids
 and may discourage
children
 from studying proactively. In Japan, often the resource of thinking is enthusiasm.
This
 is to say, it is important to have interests to trigger thinking and it is contradicting if
children
 stop having interests in various stuff as the result of the intervention from adults.
Thus
,
parents
 should not control the free time of
kids
 and give them some space. To summarize, I do not agree with either statement rather stand at neutral.
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