Some parents believe that their children should do educational activities during their free time. Others say that in this way children are under pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

For many

parents

, the

further

career of their

children

is

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of paramount importance. Henceforth, some

parents

think that their

children

should not waste their time even out of school and their activities must contain some educational activities, whereas others assert that it gives too much stress for

children

. I can neither support nor oppose both views, rather I take a neutral position for the following reasons. Against the backdrop of the increase in competition among students, the educational pressure has been getting more serious. In response to

this

, acquiring academic thinking methods from the earlier period through seeking opportunities for study

besides

the school will be an asset when

kids

grow.

For example

, according to an article, it is alleged that the capacity of thinking of adults is contingent on how he spent his time when he was a kid.

Besides

this

, it is

also

confirmed through a survey that 70% of students who enrolled in the famous university in Japan had received some intelligence education when they were small. Since

children

often face individual study, it is important to intervene to promote educational activities outside of the school.

On the other hand

, given that many

kids

are often keen to play TV games or to do sports, it is necessary for their

parents

to control their

children

.

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though,

this

might be a stress for

kids

and may discourage

children

from studying proactively. In Japan, often the resource of thinking is enthusiasm.

This

is to say, it is important to have interests to trigger thinking and it is contradicting if

children

stop having interests in various stuff as the result of the intervention from adults.

Thus

,

parents

should not control the free time of

kids

and give them some space. To summarize, I do not agree with either statement rather stand at neutral.