Today foods travel thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

The bar graph compares the percentages of citizens from five different towns of Australia who buy beverages at café or have some habits related to these drinks. Overall, it is clear that almost every city has a considerable proportion of those who visited a cafe in the
last
4 weeks. The
next
highest percentage relates to people who prefer to buy instant
coffee
and only
then
the lovers of fresh caffeine.
Two
large cities, Sydney and Melbourne, had the same tendency in terms of the distribution of votes for presented options. Just over 60% of people from these
two
places mentioned that they were in a cafe.
Also
, there are slightly more city dwellers from Melbourne who went to buy instant
coffee
in the previous 4 weeks than in Sydney, approximately 48% and 45% respectively. But at the same time, the number of votes prevails in Sydney over the figure of Melbourne within the option of fresh
coffee
.
In contrast
, Adeliade appears to be the only city where the proportion of people who prefer instant
coffee
is quite similar to the proportion of visitors of cafes, which is almost 50%;
however
,
this
part of Australia has one of the lowest per cent of fresh
coffee
lovers, which is about
two
times lower than other
two
bars (35%).
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