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Some people believe that technology has led to many positive developments in their lives, while others think technology is gradually taking over control of the way people live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the
last
 decade, technology development has
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accelerated
 dramatically.
As a result
, lifestyle has been changed. Some people believe that technology changed our
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lives
life
lifes
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 to be better.
However
, others claim that
such
 developments
gradullay
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gradually
 control our
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lives
life
lifes
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. I believe that technological development advantages outweigh the disadvantages. On one hand, the advancement in telecommunications, computers and machines allow the community to function
on
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appropriate
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 time and
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organized
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 way.
For example
, using computers in companies and hospitals facilitate the
commications
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communications
communication
 between the employees and increased customers satisfaction.
Furthermore
, the advancement in medical technology enhanced the diagnosis and the treatment for various diseases
such
 as cancers and heart problems.
On the other hand
, some people see that
techological
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technological
 devices take control of our life. As a consequence,
public
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 pays attention to their phones, tablet and personal computer, while they ignore their family relationships.
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These
 issues
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 been increasing and damaging the community stability.
For instance
, we can see newly married couples and young parents are suffering to focus on
thier
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their
 roles in life as they are
occupaied
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occupied
 with virtual reality
plataforms
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platforms
 like Facebook and
Instigram
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Instagram
. In conclusion, Technological advancement provides our society with
normous
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enormous
 advantages
such
 as computers, medical devices and telecommunication
plataforms
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platforms
. Despite that, our society
suffer
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 from side effects from
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innovations
such
 as divorce rate and poor parenting style. I believe that the advantages of machinery development
compansate
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compensate
compensates
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 disadvantages.
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