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Some people think that governments should spend public money on saving minority languages, Others, however, believe that would be a waste of public money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #governments #money #minority #languages #waste
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Some maintain that public
money
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 should be spent to preserve
minority
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languages
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, while others believe that it is not important so spending
money
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 on those is unworthy. One of the main benefits of saving
minority
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languages
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 is the fact that they are an important part of
people
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's cultural heritage.
Minority
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languages
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 are not only a way of communication but
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 a representative of
people
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's development of lifestyle.
People
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 can gain more knowledge about one culture by learning their language. Another benefit is the fact that making an effort to protect
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languages
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 can conserve a wide variety of traditions and customs which are another way to let
people
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 gain a better understanding of different cultural heritage.
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, there are some reasons why some
people
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 think spending
money
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 on
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 issue is a waste.
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, it is not an issue that
governments
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 can easily solve with public
money
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. It is a problem that involved different lifestyles and traditional values, and
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 even if
governments
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 spend enormous
money
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 on it, it may fail.
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,
governments
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 need high costs to make
minority
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languages
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 survive.
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, it increases the burden on taxpayers. There are more important concerns for
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 to tackle,
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 as helping homeless
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, decreasing the high unemployment rate, and preventing
people
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 from living hungry and in poverty. In my opinion, while
minority
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languages
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 are helpful to learn about cultural diversity, I agree that spending high costs on protecting
minority
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languages
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 from extinction is a waste of
money
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. I prefer spending public
money
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 on other more severe issues.
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