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Human activities have negative effects on plants and animal species. Some people think that it is too late to do anything about this problem. Other people believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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society claims that there is nothing we could do to stop the damages
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, others hold the opposite idea, saying that effective actions could still be helpful to modify the issue. In my view, I agree more with the
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 one. It cannot be denied that too many human activities have caused serious problems for the environment and
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. Economic profit
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 chased by
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 the preservation of
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.There are
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 green plants and recreational grounds left in the city
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, but more commercial buildings and businesses occupy the green areas where are originally designed for
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 to relax. Not only urban distracts, but
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 suburb areas are used to plant agricultural products
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 of leaving the space area free. Even, there is still a large number of
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, including me, believing that issues can be tackled with effective actions. The awareness of protecting
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 and wild animals has been raised in recent decades. Some governments
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 made strict laws to regulate
people
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behavior
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over hunting
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 wild animals or trading their body parts to the black market .
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, advertisements
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advocating eco-friendly tourism can be found everywhere.
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 are more willing to changing their lifestyle by using public transportation like the metro and railway
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 of driving only. In conclusion,
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 some negative effects have been made on
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,it is never too late for us to realize the mistake and take some actions to tackle the issue.
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