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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss two views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays mental health is given utmost importance. A section of people argues that leisure
activities
 like reading, solving puzzles can relax
mind
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 ;
however
, other
section
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sections
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 refute the idea.In
this
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 we will discuss the implication of
activities
 as well as rest. I would like to present my views by diving deeper into the topic before deducing
reasonable
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 conclusion. Mental tasks
is
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are
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 challenging and engaging for
humanbeings
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human beings
. The
activities
 give ample opportunities to challenge themselves results in creating pressure to think logically in order to solve the task. The effort pumped in solving
task
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tasks
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 helps their
brain
 to develop analytical and logical thinking.
For
example
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 it is popularly seen that chess players
excell
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excel
excelled
 in mathematics as their
brain
 is trained to calculate and react at
faster
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a faster
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 pace.The person who
are
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is
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 more leisure
activities
 involving
brain
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the brain
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tend
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tends
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 to resolve problems easily. The human
speicies
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species
 requires peace and rest to rejuvenate itself. In
this
fast moving
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fast-moving
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world
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 people
to
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apply
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tend to overwork and gets
burntout
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burnt out
..
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.
...
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 Resting gives peace to mental health but
also
 to
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physical
physically
physicall
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the physicall
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 body.It is
utmost
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of utmost
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important
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importance
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 to refresh itself.
For instance
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,
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A study shows that people tend to work efficiently after returning from holidays.
Holiday
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The holiday
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 gives them
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to rest and relax the muscle. The peace and calmness associated with relaxing refreshes mind and body.
Therefore
, it can be clearly said that resting helps to purify
brain
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the brain
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. I believe that mental
activities
takes
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take
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is
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are
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 more effective to be practised . Mental task challenges as well as
helps
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help
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 you to remain active
throught
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through
throughout
thought
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