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Some people think watching TV and films makes children more creative. Others think that it can actually lower their creativity. Discuss both views and gove your opinion

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Television is often considered as a source of entertainment
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 which a section of society believes that watching TV and pictures have adverse effects on the lives of children as their mental ability to create new wonders decreases.
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, other segments believe that it helps in boosting their creative skills, as, children learn new things from these sources. I personally have a vote for the people who believe that these sources make adolescents more creative. Primarily, these multimedia gadgets are the complete package of information and knowledge.
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, when I was a child I used to watch shows related to the history of our country, zoological and biological activities, some reality shows related to dance,
singing
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 which inculcated a feeling of motivation in me to do something in my
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, there are many documentary films which are based on real lives, related to culture,
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 tradition of certain
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 through which children can gain practical knowledge
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On the contrary
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, people of
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adolescents
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 age sometimes start watching movies related to a crime that causes an adverse effect on an individual's
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life
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 as he/she will be inclined towards
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 kind of thrilling
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 and will look for
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shortcuts to earn money.
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, in our vicinity, there was a child who used to watch movies all the time and was so fascinated by action movies that he never used to study which led to the non-creative
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 of that child.
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, I would say that TV or watching films is a good source to acquire creative skills if utilized in the right way under the parents' guidance.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to focus more on clearly delineating the two viewpoints in separate paragraphs.
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While your conclusion is clear, you might want to reinforce it with a summary of the main points presented in the essay.
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Include more specific examples and elaboration for each point to strengthen your argumentation.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is well-structured with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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You provided personal examples that illustrate your perspective, which is a great addition to your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imagination
  • innovation
  • cognitive development
  • creative faculties
  • educational content
  • storytelling
  • narrative structure
  • passive consumption
  • overstimulation
  • active playtime
  • realistic scenarios
  • screen time
  • media exposure
  • holistic development
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