Many parents are concerned about the violent computer games or movies or leisure activities. How can this impact children ? What can be done to solve this problem?.

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, drugs and even
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sexual
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content
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part? Because these
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don't check which
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check the
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specific age and
types
of players.so parents have to check
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children
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