Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Now a days
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, the increasing rate of overweight among children and adults is
worldwide
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a worldwide
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health
issue. Most of the working
people
are finding
difficult
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it difficult
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to allot some
time
or don't have
time
at all for any physical activities due to which they are facing many
health
issues.
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why IT working
people
cannot indulge themselves in any
excercises
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exercises
and what measures have to be taken to halt
this
problem
.
People
have no
time
for physical activities because of
work
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lifestyle they
chooose
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choose
. Most of the IT jobs require
person
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a person
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working on a laptop or computer and
typical
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the typical
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working hours of any IT job is 8
hour
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. But
people
always tend to stress and do overtime to meet deadlines. After spending
some
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many hours working on
laptop
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a laptop
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, most of the
people
return home to just relax and have no stamina to hit
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the gym
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.
For example
,
people
in India tend to
work
more to complete the
work
sooner and
then
spend
rest
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the rest
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of the
time
relaxing with family. Thanks to our
advance
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technologies which are making life easier but
also
reducing more
phsycial
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physical
efforts in washing clothes or dishes ourselves. Due to these factors
person
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a person
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is hardly being motivated or busy fulfilling their personal and
professionl
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professional
commitments to ever think about personal fitness. There are many ways to handle the
problem
such
as IT employees should avoid working overtime even if
company
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the company
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is paying you double and try to be more organized. Invest in hiring
personal
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trainer on
initial
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days of exercising who can keep you motivated. If you don't find
time
in
evening
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the evening
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for physical activities aim for early mornings and
this
can be more beneficial for your
health
.
Lastly
, companies should
also
encourage employees in maintaining physical fitness.
For example
, building indoor gyms in
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office
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.
Hence
one should find ways to be motivated for exercising and have
awarness
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awareness
of
health
issues. Lack of
physcial
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physical
activity can lead to serious
health
problem
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problems
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and it is important to solve
this
problem
.
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what are the reasons for not
excercising
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exercising
and how it can be prevented to maintain
a
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good
health
. By end of the
day
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it is every individual's duty to find
right
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balance between their
work
life and personal life to succeed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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