In some countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?
At
this
moment, there are some countries show of criminal acts are carried out by adolescents. This
essay will illustrate what causes these problems
and how to solve them.
There are plenty of causes of teenagers who make an illegal, including, a social environment with family, friends and school
systems. To begin
with, young people may see the violent act of their parents or friends who is not good may lead us to do the bad things. Moreover
, school
systems could make them imitate because there are battles and shooting in the games. For example
from these causes, teenagers will copy the people around them. Consequently
, it could make them violent, such
as, addictive and fight with each other. Additionally
, there are examples of violence from games, such
as RoV, Pub-g and free-fire. Therefore
, the violence caused by children
may be due to the people around them and their social environment.
However
, I believe there are various solutions to these problems
, such
as the school
should add more activities for children
and government should give them more public spaces. Firstly
, schools should give them freedom of speech and support their hobbies. Secondly
, if children
have more space they could spend time on what they like and relax after school
. Lastly
, parents should be open to talk and change mindset to their kids. For example
from hobbies, baking a cake and playing music will help to show their talents. Furthermore
, the game should have warnings in a good way. Hence
, children
problems
could be solved.
To conclude, teenagers who have criminal acts will be decreased. If the schools, parents and government could take part in it, then
we could solve these issues and problems
will eventually be solved.Submitted by thitiwatpava on
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