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Discuss the differences between the way of life in your country now and the way of life in the past

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During the
last
 years, Colombia has undergone many positive
changes
 in different aspects that make the city much better now than in the past. In
this
 essay, I will discuss some of the
changes
 in my
country
 now and the
way
 of life in the past. In the
first
 place, the advance in the technological aspect. At present, people have access to a lot of technological
infrastructure
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 that helps and contributes in a positive
way
 to the general development of the
country
.
For example
, communications between countries and cities are now done via the internet through different platforms
such
 as
google
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, Instagram, etc. quickly and in
real time
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. Another big change in a positive
way
 is the modern infrastructure developed. In the current
time
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 Colombia has been growing in all the aspects relative
with
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the
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modern construction, making more access vias and generated more public entertainment places.
For instance
, now there are more places where people can go and have fun with their friends like theatres, casinos, shopping centres, etc. The
last
one
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but not the less important change is
the
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women participation in the
laboral
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labour
 market. In the
past
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 the women paper in the society was mostly taking care of her children and the home tasks but
actually
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 women can go to the universities and can be
professional
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professionals
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 that
are
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 prepare for
participated
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participating
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 in different laboral places and they are contributing to
economy
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the economy
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 in the
country
. To conclude, Colombia is a better
country
 now
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than
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that
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than
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the
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 past. The
country
 has
have
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to
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too
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 many
changes
 in a very good
way
 and its
changes
has
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have
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 favoured the
developed
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development
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 of the place in aspects as
a
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an
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 economy, infrastructure, culture and others.
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