Many people think that the government should pay for the tuition fees of all adults who are interested in university studies. Do you agree or disagree?

Education
is a necessity to build comfortable and liveable societies. Particularly,
education
at university is the crucial point of the idea.
However
, the
cost
of
education
at the university is another important point. As being a student at the university is a kind of job, individuals are not able to pay
cost
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of living.
For example
, people
needs
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basic needs in order to survive,
such
as shelter,
foods
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, and clothing. Mainly, they should have sustainable income to afford those needs. Obviously, pupils and families cannot bear expenses.
On the other hand
, people must be hired or have regular income to pay expenses. In
this
context, incentives are required, but government subsidiaries for purpose of providing
education
services bring extra charges
on
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government’s
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budget.
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,
budget
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the budget
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cannot be capable to pay
cost
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the cost
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of other services
such
as
construction
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the construction
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of infrastructures, and security. In my opinion, there are many factors why governments should provide course fees.
To begin
with, the communities know
influence
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of the
education
on people;
therefore
, they desire to construct populations, which comprise well-educated individuals.
Moreover
,
sustainability
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of countries
depend
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on improving
education
standards.
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,
production
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process
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processes
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in modern times significantly depend on technological equipment,
hence
the
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professionals are necessary to manage machines in order to control production processes.
Further
, the population of the world
numerous
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times higher than past, and nourishment is a big problem.
As a result
, for improving agricultural productivity new methods and instruments are needed. As factors
indicates
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, unless the countries thrive
number
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a number
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of
educated
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an educated
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person, they cannot have opportunities to improve the quality of the society. İn conclusion,
education
is necessary to block public conflicts and it is
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a necessity
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necessity
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to sustain existing of the countries. If authorities desire wealthy communities, they have to bear
cost
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the cost
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of
education
.
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