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The news media have become too much influential in people lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#news #media #people #lives #development
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Stepping into the 21st century, state-of-the-art technologies have set their foot in almost all spheres of our life. Whether the
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 has enslaved or liberated
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's lives nowadays
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 long been a subject of debate. While I agree that there are some cases that human beings are negatively affected by the coverage of wild
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, I still believe that it is a breakthrough
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 mankind that brings
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 benefits. On the one hand, it cannot be denied that owing to the development of mass
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,
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 can be easily informed and get up-to-date with the world. There are more
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 preferring online
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 through TVs or smartphones thanks to its convenience and gratuitousness.
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, the content of social
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 posts can be meaningful to adolescents. With platforms like YouTube or Facebook, they can have access to
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's stories knowing that they are experiencing similar struggles to their own, giving courage and confidence.
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, the proliferation of
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 has had profound effects on health. These negative effects include obesity, back pain or eye strain, which especially affect children. It not only causes physical but mental health. Research shows that
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 consumption is associated with anxiety and depression as a consequence of seeing fake perfection of
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 or face images on a daily basis.
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,
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 themselves should be in control of these activities.
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, parents should put a limit on their children's time on TV. In short,
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's lives today rely so much on
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 despite some cons related to health it may bring. I have full faith in the near future when
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people
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 are harmed by the
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