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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#say #majority #employees #home #workplace
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In the modern world, the lifestyle of
people
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are
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 changing
quickly
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 than in the past. Nowadays, there are many alternatives for an individual person as compared to previous decades. It is believed by some
people
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 that in most
of
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the
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cases, it would be more beneficial to
work
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 from
home
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 in lieu of
moved
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 to a workstation
in
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each day. In my
opinon
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opinion
, the advantages of working from
home
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outweight
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outweigh
 the disadvantages.
People
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 can feel comfortable and can manage to
work
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 from anywhere though it is sometimes difficult to track the
work
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 status of the
employees
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.
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 with, the
first
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 reason why
people
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 should
work
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 from
home
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 is that
the
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most
people
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 feel comfortable
to
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work
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 from
home
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.
People
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 can manage their
time
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 easily and do
work
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 from anywhere as they
wishes
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.
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, in Bangladesh, the majority of the
people
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 had been performed their
office
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 tasks from
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remote places during COVID-19 pandemic situations. It was very easy to manage in terms of both flexible working hours and economic hardship.
Beacuse
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Because
 the
employees
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 didn't need to rent a house near
office
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 place and
additionally
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, the transportation cost had been reduced.
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,
employees
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 can able to do
work
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 with more enjoyment as compared to
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office
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the office
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 place.
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, there are many drawbacks for the organization that conducts their
work
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 from
home
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. Sometimes it is really difficult to track the status of the
employees
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.
This
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 happens because
manager
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the manager
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 can not keep their eyes on
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the worker
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worker
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workers
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 for measuring their performance.
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, in Bangladesh, many
of
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the
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job
holder
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holders
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 did not
work
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 properly during the
home
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 working
office
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time
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 as they had worked only a small
proprotion
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proportion
 of
time
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 as compared to
office
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work
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time
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.
Consequently
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,
this
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hamper
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hampers
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 the organization
reputations
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 as well as less
the
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productivity. To conclude,
although
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 there are some drawbacks in working from
home
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, it makes feel comfortable, decreasing the cost and saves more
time
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 to
work
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. It is recommended to
work
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 from
home
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 which will increase conveniences in the following days.
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