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Some school have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive development or a negative one? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge and experience

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Almost all of the children today, have their own mobile
phones
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Although
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 these
devices
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 might affect the
students
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 in terms of safety, connectivity, and studies, many schools have decided to ban
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usage
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them
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. In
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 essay, I would talk about how, in my view,
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 step can benefit them academically, socially as well as physically. Restricting
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phone use in the classroom itself can improve learning.
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 of obsoleting the
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 of them, there will be lesser distractions for both teachers and
students
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.
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: As humans, we have the constant urge to check our
phones
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 repeatedly for any new updates on social media or new tests resulting in reduced attention in the study environment.
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, it will play a vital role in skewing down the attention span of the
students
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 which would create a long term effect on their academic progress. A blanket restriction on mobile
phones
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 will free the learners from
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 habit of compulsive checking thereby helping them to be more determined and focused. Lesser phone
usage
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 helps in improving a person’s wellbeing, both socially and physically.
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 is simply because, with these
devices
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 not being in
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close proximity, we shall be involved in more
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face-to-face interactions. There will
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 be an increase in participation in physical activities like sports.
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, if a student has his/her phone with them in the playground during
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lunch, rather than engaging in any sort of physical activity like games or participating in meaningful discussions, they will subconsciously tend to sit in a corner and indulge in their screens. These unhealthy practices account for the delay in
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 of communication and social skills.
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, it promotes a sedentary lifestyle which is one of the major reasons for health problems like obesity in children at a very young age.
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, restricting the
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 of these
devices
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 can help create a more active lifestyle as well as impart the
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 confidence for social interactions. Mobile
phones
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 have become quite popular nowadays. While these
devices
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 have their own benefits when it comes to academic learning or schools
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 particular, the number of negative impacts outweigh the positive ones.
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, I believe that restriction on their
usage
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 can help the
students
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 to be more focused academically along with the development of more physical agility and better social connections in their life ahead.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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