Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? Given reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Happiness
is very difficult to define
,
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because it means so many different things to different
people
.
While
some
people
link
happiness
to wealth and material success, others think it lies in emotions and loving personal
relationships
. Yet others think that spiritual paths, rather than either the material world or
relationships
with
people
, are the only way to true
happiness
. Because
people
interpret
happiness
for themselves in so many different ways, it is difficult to give any definition
that is
true for everyone.
However
, if there are different kinds of
happiness
for different individuals
then
the first step in achieving it would be to have a degree of self-knowledge. A person needs to know who he or she is before being able to know what it is that makes him or her happy. Of course, factors
such
as loving
relationships
, good health, the skills to earn a living and a peaceful environment all contribute to our
happiness
too. But
this
does not mean that
people
without these conditions cannot be happy.
Overall
, I think
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ability to keep clear perspectives in life is a more essential factor in achieving
happiness
. By that I mean an ability to have a clear sense of what is important in our lives (the welfare of our families, the quality of our
relationships
, making other
people
happy, etc.) and what is not (a problem at work, getting annoyed about trivial things, etc.) Like self-awareness,
this
is
also
very difficult to achieve, but I think these are the two factors that may be the most important for achieving
happiness
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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