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Many people think that the government should pay for the tuition fees of all adults who are interested in university studies. Do you agree or disagree?

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The diagram illustrates the manufacturing
process
 of
cement
 and concrete for construction intent. There are four stages to implement in the fabrication
process
 in order to produce
cement
.
To begin
 with, crushing limestone and clay with the help of a crusher to acquire powder. In the
second
 step, obtained powder blends into the mixer. The
third
 one is heating the blended materials burn to a specific degree to produce a specific material at the end of the heating
process
. The final
process
 is grinding clinker and packaging. The step
that is
 used in the fabrication
process
 of concrete is fewer than
cement
 production. The
process
 works by mixing materials according to the defined proportions. The
process
 starts with blending
cement
, water, sand and gravel into the concrete mixer at a determined time. The proportions are 15 per
cent
cement
, 10 per
cent
 water, 25 per
cent
 sand, and 50 per
cent
 gravel.
As a result
, the material, which can be used in the building
process
, is produced.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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