Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Certain individuals argue that international
visitors
should be charged more than local people in order to
visit
cultural and historical attractions. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
statement.
This
essay aims to highlight my view by using points and examples to prove the argument.
First
of all, local people would take pride
of
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their own ancient attractions whenever international
tourists
would
visit
them. Spreading their culture for travellers to know more about their country is more valuable than getting money.
However
, charging extra entrance fees to international
tourists
for the preservation and maintenance of
culture
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heritage will reduce their visits.
This
is because
in
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order to introduce culture to other countries, many
visitors
are required, so if there are fewer
visitors
, cultures are unable to be well known.
Thus
, it is a not good way to increase their fees to cultural locations.
Furthermore
, most international
tourists
decide to
visit
other countries with
limited
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budget. For
this
reason,
tourists
may come back if they try to
visit
without knowing the additional charge. In fact, in some cases, even extra fees
are
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only charged to foreign
tourists
have been announced in advance. With
this
, international
tourists
would not
visit
there and think it was unfair. Foreign
visitors
pay enough money for other expenses
such
as accommodation, food and souvenirs. To sum up, I believe that people should know that it is more important for others to let our own cultures
to
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be known to others than economic profit. Increasing payment to international
tourists
would decrease
in
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tourism and reduce the cultural widespread.
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